"Im" should have an apostrophe between the two letters. "I'm" is a contraction of "I am," and the apostrophe denotes the letter "a" has been removed.
Similarly, "dont" should have an apostrophe between the "n" and the "t." "Don't" is a contraction of "do not," and the apostrophe denotes the letter "o" has been removed.
Along the same lines, "its" needs an apostrophe between the "t" and the "s" to denote it is a contraction of "it was," and the "wa" has been removed.
When used as a pronoun, "I" should always be capitalized.
The word "being" should be remove entirely. It adds nothing. In fact, it is somewhat confusing and detracts from your readers' comprehension of what you're trying to communicate.
Always write out numbers smaller than ten in text. "5" should be "five."
Lastly, you should have used "who" rather than "that." The word "someone" refers to a person, rather than a thing. When referring to people use "who;" only when referring to things should you use "that."
Seven glaring errors in a 30-word post.
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